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heatherb5 |
Feedback: Losing a Part of You |
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Thank you for taking the time to read my new story. It's something different, and I hope you enjoy it. Don't worry, it will eventually become LoVe
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In love with LoVe |
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Oh, please don't let Duncan die and then the whole town hate her because she didn't save him and she lived! I hate stories where Lily hates her! It makes me sad!! Well, I trust you becuase so far you have a great story!! Keep it up!!
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wickeddiva422 |
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I'm hoping that by eventually you mean sooner than later. I really like the premise of your story and I hope that it lives up to your and my expectations. Please post the next chapter soon.
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LoVe4ever666 |
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Oh come on. That is just not fair, and I know, I know, Life isn't fair but damnit, why did you have to kill Duincan, as mush as I don't like him. I would rather him not die at least. Great job, can't wait for the next part.
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ShyNatalie |
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OMG
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iLoVeLoganxx |
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Wow! I'm not one of Donuts biggest fans either.. but you had me near tears, that was beautiful!
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jacedes |
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Very interesting beginning. I have so many questions, but I'll hold off until I read more. I assume that Veronica will somehow be blamed for Duncan dying, even though 1) she almost died too, 2) she had nothing to do with the accident and 3) she did everything she could to save him. I was surprised that Lilly ran away. Veronica is supposed to be her best friend and she didn't even care about her? Oops, I said I wouldn't ask any questions
I will go down with this 'ship.
I won't put my hands up and surrender There will be no white flag above my door, I'm in LoVe and always will be. |
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heatherb5 |
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Aww tanxs guys
And uh oh expectations, now I really hope I don't ruin it! As for Lilly and Duncan, I love Lilly, and I'm not a big fan of Duncan. But that's not why I'm writing this. I'm writing this because I wanted to try something new, and see what would happen if Duncan had died instead of Lilly. So in order for Veronica to be ostracized, Lilly has to sorta turn her back, but it won't last for long. Thank you guys |
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mcyprusoilm |
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Interesting very, very interesting. I am dying to see where you are going to take this story!!
Why did Lily run away crying. Is donut dead?? and Why did Logan look away?? Is everyone going to balme Veronica and if so what the hell for??? Sorry I know I'm one demanding reader LOL :-) Please, Oh Please keep this fic coming!!!! !!Feed the Fic Whore Monster!! |
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lapdogdesign34 |
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Wow. That was really intense and vivid. Poor Donut. Poor Veronica.
Looking forward to more! Update soon! |
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LoVesMeSomeLogan |
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First off, I noticed some gramatical errors.
I hope you don't mind if I help. There-can be used in contexts such as "over there." or "There they went."- it is a form of direction or placement. Their can be used in contexts such as, "their car" or "their hands"- it is an expression of possession or ownership. Finally, the [/i]- is a contraction of they are. It is used in contexts such as "they're going out to eat" or "they're going to their house over there" I just noiced one or two little misteaks and the misuse of those words or word, was one of them. I don't mean to be mean or in any way make you feel bad because a lot of people make that misteak. I was only trying to help for future reference. That was very cool! I was actually biting my nails with anticipation and nerves. For a while I thought you were going to let him die....course, I don't know if he is or not....but....I don't know. I guess Lilly and Logan know something....interesting. Keep going, it's really good! |
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