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motylik20 |
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I knew she had a kid! Yay! I can't wait to see how you continue. If you'll have Logan tell Duncan out right and if Duncan will admit to sleeping with
Veronica at Shelly's or not. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Mac |
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Yay an update!!! I love how Logan just stumbled over her and then was consumed by the discovery for the rest of the day. I am really glad you started writing
from Veronica's POV and I can't wait to see what Logan does.
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daria103 |
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Great update. I was almost shouting at the computer screen when Logan was texting Duncan, badness is going to happen there when Duncan finds out, although I do
want Veronica to find out what really happened to her, you just know Duncan is gonna lose it (that is if you're sticking with the canon version of
Shelly's in regards to Duncan).
I can't believe how you had Logan find out about the baby, I was torn between laughing and cringing in embarrassment for Veronica, great reveal. I'm not sure how I feel about the addition of a baby, it's hard to imagine them together with a child that isn't Logans, but I'm looking forward to seeing how you play it out and I know by the end of the fic you'll have us all cooing over how great a family they are. I'm also looking forward to what happens when Veronica finds out about Shelly's and how that changes her home life with baby Keith, like will the father try get involved or if her feelings towards keith change when she has a face for the father. Overall I'm loving this just as much as DL, great work so far. |
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DING DING DING WE HAVE A BABY!! OH MY GOOD GRACIOUSNESS.
damn. i was not expecting that. and how Logan discovers her, i thought was hilarious. i started laughing, and somehow i fell outta my chair because apparently i suck at keeping balance, and my friend walked in at that exact moment, and she was like 'what the hell are you doing on the floor?' im intrigued as to how this story will unfold after this.... as always, please update ASAP, my dear. -Logan is my Lovah. P.S. I was suggesting that they sit down for a tea party after they make up. What did you think I was suggesting? *insert evil grin here* |
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Wow! That was certainly an eventful chapter! You've definitely left me hanging on how things will turn out, as well as how Logan will gorw closer to
Veronica. Can't wait for more!
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motylik20 - So, You've now seen Logan's, Duncan's and V's reactions. What did you think? Of course, there will be more to come.
Mac - Yes, there should be a lot more of V's POV now. I wanted there to be a little mystery in regards to her circumstances for these first few chapters. Now that those have been revealed, it will be written more like DL was and we'll get to see what everyone is thinking. Logan is my lovah - I'm so glad that I was able to surprise you with the preg and that you enjoyed the reveal. It's difficult to know if people will find a scene as funny as you think it is when you're writing it. P.S. Of course....A tea party. Well, look forward to a sip of tea in the next couple of chapters. There will be no crumpets with that tea, nor will there even be full cups of tea, but indeed a taste of tea. (hee hee hee) daria103 - I know....everyone, including myself, cringed at the fact that Logan was running straight to Duncan. Unfortunately, I thought it was the most likely. He didn't know what had happened at Shelly's and he was lost in light of his discovery. He needed the back up of that last remaining member of the Fab Four. Not only that, but Duncan is usually the level-headed one, one that would be able to calm the situation for Logan and be a little more objective...especially in his non-emotional, post-Lilly state. Wasn't the case, obviously, but Logan had no way of knowing. I'm glad you enjoyed the reveal. I thought it was funny, but I never know how things will be received. As for Logan not being the father of the baby....IF he isn't, I might have some ideas as to how to make it a better situation. We'll see. You're going to have to stick with me for awhile, though. This won't be over real quick. Lots of work to do before we find out who the father is. As for Shelly's, V now knows what happened, so let's see how she responds. silent observer - I can't say I'm sorry for leaving you hanging....that's got to be one of the perks. hee hee hee Anyway, there is plenty more roller coaster coming. So, sit back and enjoy the ride! Thanks to all of you. I love hearing what you're thinking!!!!
Tuesday, my night to put the kids to bed, send the husband to the bedroom. Tuesday, my night to perch, anxiously awaiting the chime of 9:00. The calm, the excitement, the hour when all else fades and there is but one single focus. No jokes, no games, just the intense study of this thing we call LoVe.
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Great update, that chapter was everything that I expected it to be, all of the reactions as everything came to light were spot on. I loved how you wrote
Duncan, it's so like him to not get why she wouldn't just let him go play daddy right away. I do really hope that he isn't the father, you could
just picture the Kanes barging in and taking over, although if he is I'm fairly sure that with his mental state and the circumstances of conception (even
with him being an all powerful Kane) that Veronica could get a court to rule that he shouldn't be near baby Keith.
I loved how Logan was with the baby, as I mentioned above, it's hard to think of Logan and Veronica as a family without him as the father (I do so like my mushy, fairytale endings lol) but I knew that you write it in a way that I could buy into and you totally did. As soon as he was protecting baby Keith from Duncan I was all for surrogate daddy Logan and by the time he fell asleep holding him I was a pile of mush. My heart broke for Veronica when everything came out but I really enjoyed her reaction, like everyone else I'm sure, I always felt that Duncan was forgiven far too quickly in canon. I like the way you had Veronica not just giving into him, standing firm on keeping him away from Keith and demanding answers, and mostly just wanting to get rid of him (right there with you V!). I definitely agree with you that telling Duncan was the most logical course of action for Logan when he found out. All the points you made in your response above are completely true, Logan had no reason to believe Duncan would be in anyway involved, he just needed his best friend and felt he had a right to know. Reading it was just like one of those moments when you're watching a movie, you know that the character has to take a certain course of action, but you scream at the TV for them not to anyway lol. Don't worry I'll be sticking with you, I can still remember waiting desperately for updates on DL but it being so worth it when the story played out, I came prepared for the long haul on this one (an Aaron Echolls movie reference, I feel dirty lol). I can't wait to see what happens when Veronica goes into the room and sees baby Keith asleep with daddy Logan |
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Wonderful! I had to come read it again... Can't wait for more!!!
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motylik20 |
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Beautiful chapter! Of course Duncan couldn't figure out why V wouldn't want him in his baby's life. *rolls eyes* I love that V stood up to him and
didn't let him see the baby. And protective Logan was awesome. I was a pile of mush when he fell asleep with the baby. *sighs* Such a beautiful image. I
can't wait to see how much you stick to canon. I have a feeling that Duncan won't be the father, because of how you mentioned the baby's hair in
the chapter before that, but I could be completely wrong. I don't know what would be worse though. Duncan or the other option. Or maybe you have something
up your sleeve and changed canon around completely. Heh. I can't wait to see where this goes! Especially since the next scene should be V finding Logan
asleep with her baby boy.
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finajk: Well, thank you. Two, for the price of one. I'm a lucky girl!!!
motylik20: Tell me about it. Duncan's just an oblivious punk! And, I too love me some protective Logan. In fact, watch for him as he will be coming out to play some more in this fic. So, I'm not saying that Duncan is or is not the father, but I believe I said that the baby's hair was a dark-colored patch (if I'm remembering correctly). So, in my opinion, that could leave it open to Duncan, Beav, Logan or any other dark haired-type, 09er or not. *smile* Hey, I hope you enjoyed this new chapter. Lost of BK/L and V/L interaction. Thanks. daria103: Wow! okay, so that's a serious review! I love it. I love that you are interested enough in the fic to put that much into the review. Thanks so much. I'm so glad that you see the characters reactions as canon. I try my best to keep the actual characters as close to canon as possible. Now, in this new update, I did address the Kane family and their power. Personally, I'm nervous for V. But, that's just me. *smile* I'm glad you liked the role of Logan with the baby and I'm assuming you probably enjoyed their further interaction in this chaper. I'm glad you're warming up to surrogate Logan. If he's not the father, then there may be some things that assist you in further warming up to him as surrogate. Let's see. Oh, yeah...totally agree with you on the Duncan thing. I think canon messed up the D and paternity issue. I plan on fixing at least a few of their mistakes in my fic. hee hee hee I'm glad that you enjoyed DL so much and that it was worth it in the end. I'm sure trying to make this one a safe gamble. Thanks!!!
Tuesday, my night to put the kids to bed, send the husband to the bedroom. Tuesday, my night to perch, anxiously awaiting the chime of 9:00. The calm, the excitement, the hour when all else fades and there is but one single focus. No jokes, no games, just the intense study of this thing we call LoVe.
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FYI - I keep forgetting that when I do a colon, dash, end parenthesis, that Yuku now turns it into a yelling smilie. If you see that from me....most likely I
mean to actually smile. So, I'm trying to use the *smile* now, but I will most likely forget from time to time. Not trying to yell at you!!!
Tuesday, my night to put the kids to bed, send the husband to the bedroom. Tuesday, my night to perch, anxiously awaiting the chime of 9:00. The calm, the excitement, the hour when all else fades and there is but one single focus. No jokes, no games, just the intense study of this thing we call LoVe.
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Oooohhhhhh, I loved how Logan was for once thinking about how much Veronica had to deal with and that he was worried about a diaper. Definitely enjoyed cocky
Logan and Baby Keith together. I can't wait to see what Logan is going to do next????
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motylik20 |
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I really liked this chapter! Even though there was no conscious interaction between Veronica and Logan. I really loved that she snuggled up to him in her
sleep. And how Logan had to take care of Baby Keith.
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jacedes |
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I really loved this chapter. It was an excellent way to see what Veronica and Logan were thinking about the other without actual dialogue. I especially loved
Logan taking care of Baby Keith. It gave me the warm fuzzies, especially since it bodes well for a future for him and Veronica. I also loved that Veronica
snuggled up to Logan in her sleep.
I hope that if Duncan and his parents try to take the baby, that Logan will help Veronica fight them. I can see him doing that after this chapter. |
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fan-freaking-tastic yet again, my friend.
i adore Logan in this chapter!!!! he grows so much. and i love how the baby just pees in his face. see, everyone thinks babies are so cute, and yeah, they are, but then they poo and vomit and piss in your face. im convinced that my baby cousin saves all that especially for me. she's conspiring with all the babies in my family, i swear to god. god i wish that baby was Logan's. he'd be such a good daddy!!! Duncan.. eh. he seems so.... jaded? he's the asshole, and he's trying to make himself into the victim. ugh. i bet he doesn't even care about the baby. whatta boybitch. is it just me or did i sound like a fourteen year old girl? huh. and if Ice Bitch and Man Whore and their son Blahface do try and take the baby, then i vote that Sexy McBangALot (Logan) goes and punches them in the nuts. -Logan is my lovah (who is still awaiting that taste of tea. ;] )
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Sorry to leave it so long with the feedback, I had this really long feedback all typed out and Yuku ate my post - I was so angry I had to just go away for a
day or so.
Great chapter. I loved Veronica's reaction to finding Logan and Keith and the breakdown after was brilliant. I loved that she started crying without even realising and then just quietly let it all out. Given how drained she would be from the days events, it felt like a very real reaction that she would just cry herself to sleep rather than some big dramatic breakdown. I think she would also be very mindful of not waking Keith and she wouldn't be quite ready yet to let Logan see her like that, overall I think the scene was perfect. I loved every second of Logan and Keith. I cracked up at him being so cocky in his child minding abilities, right up until the diaper change, such a typical reaction of a teenage boy that had never had to that before. I mentioned before that I was warming up to the idea of daddy Logan, well consider me firmly on t he bandwagon now. I'm getting into the idea of the three of them as a little unit and this chapter felt like a definite turning point towards that happening. As Jacedes mentioned, it was great to see what the two of them are thinking of each other right now and without dialogue, just purely their thoughts on the other. I really enjoyed Logan's thinking on Veronica, like he's finally starting to see her side on everything and understand her actions. That was my main reason for seeing this chapter as a major turning point for them. I liked the part about the Kanes, that it was acknowledged what they might try to do and it was all the more powerful that those thoughts came from Logan. We already know that Veronica is over everyone in Neptune and her only fear is for her child. Duncan is Logans last link to the fab four and his best friend, that Logan is willing to acknowledge what Duncan and his family might do to Veronica and Keith is a huge step. We know from his time with Lilly that Logan is loyal to a fault, it's huge that he can fear for Veronica and kind of take her side over the Kanes instead of trying to justify their actions because Duncan is his best friend. The ending of the chapter was perfect, I just hope Veronica doesn't freak on Logan when she wakes up. As always, can't wait for more. |
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I'm extremely exhausted right now and must go to sleep. I will post review replies tomorrow, though. Thank you so much, I truly appreciate hearing from
you! You guys have such great, detailed feedback. Thanks!!
Tuesday, my night to put the kids to bed, send the husband to the bedroom. Tuesday, my night to perch, anxiously awaiting the chime of 9:00. The calm, the excitement, the hour when all else fades and there is but one single focus. No jokes, no games, just the intense study of this thing we call LoVe.
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daria103 |
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Excellent chapter. I laughed so hard during the first part of the chapter. Veronica's gymnasics while trying to escape the bed was hilarious and poor, poor
Logan. It was hilarious but oh the embarrassment of it for him.
I'm absolutelly loving that in the light of day Logan is still standing by her and questioning the reaction of Duncan. I also like that he wants to be around her more to protect her and I completely went to much when he covered for her when Duncan called. I really like the relationship between Veronica and Wallace and although it's sad that she won't open up to him about everything it's totally understandabe. There's no way you could explain to someone that your child could be the product of siblings, however unknowingly on her part, and not expect a bad reaction. Excellent update, can't wait for more. |
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daria103 - Yeah, I think that Logan and V are being thrown into forced acknowledgement. Not only of the current situation, but of starting to look at what
happened in the past and what they used to mean to each other. It won't be easy for them, but all of this baby and paternity stuff is forcing and going to
force them to deal with some issues they thought long settled. I really thought about how to deal with V's relationships with everyone else. I just really
like the idea that she wouldn't tell others what had happened for a couple of reasons. One, she wanted to move on. She was starting a new life by going to
Pan High. If she had told people about Neptune High, it would have been like she was merging those two worlds. She wanted them to stay separate. Two, she
always knew that she wanted to protect her unborn child. Before she knew of the possibility of incest, she had known she was raped. She never wanted her son to
be talked about or told by someone about his conception. Now is no different, but to be more important. Now, it's more essential that he no one find out in
order to not have him be some town freak. Especially when you are talking about Jake Kane being involved. That makes it a National or world wide story. She
will do anything to keep him away from that storm. Even if it involves keeping info from the people she considers her best friends now. Also, even though she
trusts them, she hasn't forgotten the Fab Four. She knows that no matter how much you love people, how much you trust them, something can happen. They can
turn on you or something as simple as you just grow apart. She can't take the risk with her son's future. I'm so glad you enjoyed the BK/L
interaction. I thought it was funny when I was typing it and it acts as a gentle way to get back at Logan for being such a punk in the first part of S1. Logan
does understand the world of money, celebrity and power. After all, he lives with it everyday and he lives with his father's image as the perfect family
man. Logan knows the impact the Kane's money and power can have on V's life. Keep reading...in a couple (?) of chapters we'll get to see a little
about Duncan's thoughts on the subject. Should be interesting. Thanks so much for your ever-faithful, greatly insightful reviews.
Tuesday, my night to put the kids to bed, send the husband to the bedroom. Tuesday, my night to perch, anxiously awaiting the chime of 9:00. The calm, the excitement, the hour when all else fades and there is but one single focus. No jokes, no games, just the intense study of this thing we call LoVe.
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Mac - Thanks for the review. I really like the idea that Logan has gone through enough in his life that he knows when the stuff has really hit the fan. Not
only that, but I really think he sees BK as the newborn he once was. All of the possibilities lie ahead. His need to protect BK is a reflection of the
protection Logan never received. Make sense? Thanks, again!
motylik20: You're right to be worried about those Kane's. We know, honestly, that they could stomp on V anytime they wanted. Really, if you think about it...it's V's word against the Kane heir. And, it's not one of those situations where the rich, white boy is trying to shirk his responsibilities. If the Kane's go after the baby, it would be seen as him wanting to take on and care for his child against a mother who kept his son from him without even telling him. Hmmmm.....that doesn't sound good for V. We'll see. In a couple of chapters, Duncan will tell us what he's thinking. We haven't heard much from him...you know...since we've been spending the night with L/V for the last couple/few chapters. hee hee hee. Hey, we've got to spend our time on what's important. I feel like one of those soap operas now, that take a week to get through a day-long holiday. oh, well. Thanks!! jacedes: Hey, girl! I like that you enjoyed seeing what V and L were thinking. We know that they are not quite to a place in their undefined relationship where they can really open up to each other. Even with this night they've shared, there is still a lot of baggage for them to move past. At least their minds are getting to the right place. As for Logan helping to fight the Kane's on V's behalf, we'll see. Logan's got some split loyalties here. Duncan is and has been his best friend for years and D has always shown himself to be kind, level-headed and fair (except when he initially broke up with V and when he caught D attacking Jake). On the other hand, he had an immediate desire to protect BK and in turn V and he felt like their was a need when D was confronting V. Logan really needs to figure out what side he's going to land on or if he's going to try to land somewhere in the middle. We'll see. Logan is my Lovah: Okay, so was that enough of a sip of tea for you???? I sure hope so! May be a bit before you get any crumpets to go with it. You know, funny thing is that I've got some other readers praying for either magic that will make L the father or immaculate conception. I will have to say that I'd never given the immaculate conception idea any thought, but it's definitely an option. lol. Anyway, I'm glad that you enjoyed the interaction between BK and Logan. And, you may be right about your baby cousin getting all of the other babies to gang up on you. My little nephew that was born ALWAYS cries when his Great Aunt tries to visit him. His mom is like, okay, been 5 minutes, time for you to go. It's hilarious. I'm really starting to feel bad for her. Anyway, thanks so much for the review.
Tuesday, my night to put the kids to bed, send the husband to the bedroom. Tuesday, my night to perch, anxiously awaiting the chime of 9:00. The calm, the excitement, the hour when all else fades and there is but one single focus. No jokes, no games, just the intense study of this thing we call LoVe.
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