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heatherb5 |
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Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave feedback. I would really love to know what everyone thinks.
Heather Watch out, I've claimed Percy's Smile
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daria103 |
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I like the sound of this story. I love season 1 AU's so I'm delighted to see them still being written.
I'm interested to see what direction you take the characters in, will Lilly be a bitch or Veronica's best friend? How will Veronica and Logan react to each other when they first meet? Have Lilly and Logan ever dated? I'm taking it that they haven't since Lilly/Dick is listed in your pairings header. If I'm right, I'm dying to see what their relationship is like without the romantic history. Sorry for the lack of feedback, I find it very hard to give concrit or real feedback on first chapters because mostly I'm just dying to see where it goes after that initial setup. I'm really looking forward to seeing more of this though and seeing where you take the characters, I hope you update soon. |
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heatherb5 |
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My first feedback
And I understand about not having a lot to say, I mean it is just a prologue. But your comments were just fine, and I'm interested to see if you like the direction I'm going in. I should be posting the next chapter in a few days. This is the first time I actually have chapters pre-written. ~Heather Watch out, I've claimed Percy's Smile
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In love with LoVe |
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That was really good!. I love season one AU's, so this just made my day. I can't wait to see what happens between her and Lily. I'm hoping they're kind of friends but the bitch thing could work too. I just think it's kinda overdone. But it's your story and I'm sure either way you'll make it great. I also can't wait for the Logan/Veronica interaction. Are we gonna get some
Do we really have to wait more then twenty four hours for the next installment? You're just trying to torture us, aren't you? Well, I'll wait impatiently for it because I can't wait to read it. I hope your muse stays with you through this whole thing so we can have lots of good stuff as quick as humanly possible But just so you know, my votes with posting the next part within the next 24 seconds |
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motylik20 |
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Hey!
I really liked the prologue. This story sounds very interesting. I can't wait to see who is in her room, and if you have Keith show up at some point or no. I love season one AUs so this is a treat. When will you update next? I can't wait to read more! |
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akami808 |
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I liked your prologue, I'm very interested in seeing where you take this story. And I can't wait for the LoVe interaction and more on Veronica's background. One quick question, is Jake not Lilly & Duncan's father? You introduced them as Celeste's kids.
Please post more soon! |
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heatherb5 |
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In Love with LoVe: Because of you, I almost posted the next chapter after I read your comment, but I ended up going to Vermont on Sunday and then Monday I worked all day
motylik20: Yes Keith will be making an appearance! akami808: Yes Jake is the father of Lilly and Duncan. I think I wrote it that way because he felt it was weird enough introducing his family to her, so he tried to ease her into it. Lol if it doesn't make sense, I can always go back and change it. Watch out, I've claimed Percy's Smile
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In love with LoVe |
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Hehe. Well that was the point of my comment. To make you want to post real fast because I already LOVE this story.
Now about this chapter... LOGAN'S DEAD?!?!?!?!?!?! What? Huh? What? Please tell me it's a dream! Or Oh! I know!! Logan has a twin, doesn't he?! Okay, maybe I'm being too hopeful but couldn't he not be dead? Just be in a coma or something? For me? And I have to wait days for the next installment??? You're killing me! But if I have to wait, well fine then! (But we better get some |
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daria103 |
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I was pretty damn shocked when I read this chapter, I can't believe Logan is dead. I don't really see how it can be a LoVe fic if he is dead (I'm thinking coma?) but I'm really interested to see where this goes now.
It's a good read and well done for adding such a big twist. I have to know where this goes now, update soon. |
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heatherb5 |
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In Love with LoVe: Lol well your mind games have almost worked young grasshopper! Lol! I'm gonna try and finish writing it now, so if your lucky and I have my muse still intact, it should be posted in a few hours
Daria103: I'm so glad I'm able to shock everyone P.S. I hope everyone has faith in me to know that it's possible for Logan and Veronica to end up together Watch out, I've claimed Percy's Smile
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daria103 |
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Quote: I think the fact that it is far fetched is part of why I'll continue reading. The twist is so unlikely that it's completely hooked me, I have to know now lol. I think the fact that you're posting on a LoVe board has given me extra faith. knowing, from you posting here, that you're a LoVe shipper makes it easier to believe that somehow you'll work it round for them to be together. Honestly, I posted my last feedback right after reading the chapter, now that I've had time to get over the shock of your twist I'm really excited about how you're going to make it LoVe. It's a new twist on an OTP that we all know inside out and that's exactly what fic is for, I'm really interested to see where you go with it. I can't wait to see te next chapter and how the story develops. Great new chapter. Looks like Lilly is going to be her bitchy self. The entire encounter with Jake giving her the presents and finding out it had been her birthday, very well written. You could really feel the awkwardness. I really enjoyed the little bits that her and Logan are getting to know about each other and how worked in Keith. So Logan can touch her then, should we look forward to some ghostly loving? lol. I'm really liking where you're taking this, can't wait for more. |
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motylik20 |
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I really like this story! It's a very different approach. Poor V and what almost happened to her. And poor Logan for having to stand there helplessly. Thank god Lilly saved her. Can't wait for an update of this!
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daria103 |
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Great chapter. I'm glad the rape didn't happen and that Logan wanted to protect her throughout the attack. Are you planning to reveal who the three attackers are? I don't think it would take away from the story if you didn't, it's just my own curiosity lol.
It'll be interesting to see if Lilly is sincere in wanting to be a sister to Veronica or if it's some sort of plan she has to humiliate her. Looking forward to more. |
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In love with LoVe |
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An update! Yay! This is such a great story! And I liked the attempted rape scene. It played out well and I like that Lily is her friend now. It makes the rest of the story smoother
Also, I loved that Logan wanted so desperately to save her but couldn't. And as for Logan being dead, can't it be like they never found his body? Just his blood and he was presumed dead? But really he's alive and in a coma somewhere. Oh, yeah, good idea. Do that!! Haha! I can't wait for more!! |
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daria103 |
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I'm really getting into the whole Logan being dead angle. It's so much easier for twists and turns, he can get to know her and find out things i.e. the attempted rape, much easier. After I got over the initaial he's dead shock, I'm really loving this story.
It's wrong of me but I found it totally hilarious that Madison killed herself for Logan and he still can't stand her. Great idea. Can't wait to see more of this. |
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akami808 |
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Wow, I cant believe I totally forgot about this story since the prologue. Ok, I just have to say that I was a bit shock to learn that Logan is dead. So, Im kind of confused as to how Logan and Veronica can end up together now, especially since he was murdered and its not like his body is laying somewhere in limbo waiting to be found. And I know its wrong, but I was laughing at the part where Madison killed herself over Logan. I cant wait to read how Mr. Mars and Veronica are going to send Madison off to her new life.
Also, when are we going to find out more about what happened to Logan and what Veronica read in the files she found? Is Logan going to start to remember what happened to him soon? I really do like the premise of your story, more so with the whole dead Logan issue and them getting together. I just have one gripe though; I dont understand why nothing was done about Veronica being attacked by those three guys. It looks like it was just glanced over like it never happened, just to get Veronica and Lilly to bond a little. It really bothers me since Im pretty sure Lilly might know who those guys were. And an attempt rape isnt something to gloss over and ignore. Please update soon! |
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daria103 |
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Great chapter, I'm glad to see this fic is back.
I'm interested to see what happens with Madison, if Logan was the real reason she killed herself or if there's something bigger going on that will have to be dealt with before she moves on. Great way of having Veronica share her secret with Keith, it was a really nice reveal. Sweet, but not too sentimental, really well done. I also liked the talk between Logan and Veronica, it was nice to see them develop their friendship a bit more. I'm looking forward to more of this, there's loads of questions I need answered and I can't wait to see where you go with it. |
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heatherb5 |
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akami808 wrote: As I was just re-reading this story, the same thought came to mind. But the thing is, is it too late to add it in? Or should I go back and fit it in
somewhere? I'll have to think it over, and any suggestions would be really appreciated!
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I really loved the new chapter! I can't wait how Veronica will deal with the knowledge of the affair Logan had and that Duncan might be the killer. I
don't think he is. But I don't know who it really is. Can't wait to read more!
I think you could still add the consequences of the attempted rape in now. It's just been a few days right? |
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I'm glad you decided to keep posting this story!!!! I know I'll hate you when it will be Logan moment to move on, but until that, I really live the
relationship between Dead-Logan and Veronica. Hope they will get even closer! I also love the instantaneous bonding Veronica had with Keith.
I hope you'll update soon! |
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akami808 |
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Yay, I'm glad that you updated, I was wondering what happened to this story. The mystery of Logan's death and the introduction of ghost Kendall are intriguing. I'm just a little confused as to why Mr. Mars would think that Duncan could have killed Logan because he was secretly seeing Madison, when in the earlier chapters there isn't any indication that Logan had a thing for Madison, since he could not even tolerate her. So, I'm anxious to see how the mysteries all pan out. I can't wait for the next update, please don't take too long. Besides, I'm still curious as to how Logan and Veronica are going to end up together. I'll be so heartbroken if he has to move on. By the way, with the black smoke and all, did Madison go to hell? LOL As I was just re-reading this story, the same thought came to mind. But the thing is, is it too late to add it in? Or should I go back and fit it in somewhere? I'll have to think it over, and any suggestions would be really appreciated!You have a pretty good flow going on now, with the whole introduction of the mysteries, that I'm not sure how addressing the attempt rape will fit right now. I think it would have fit better if it was addressed right after it happened. Because right now, its not even on Veronica's mind. |
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