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Great one-shot! I especially liked the beginning and how you describe her insomnia, her fear, the way she lived on autopilot.

I thought I'd just point out a few small things though:

When listing the dead people near the beginning, I think seeing Keith's name there may have more impact if it were the last one--it's his death that she must feel most acutely.

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It was ironic how he was the one person that gave her the closest feeling she would ever have to peace.

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I think it should be "the one person *who* gave her..."

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She had longed given up trying to figure out why, but the awe she felt by his reaction to her was still there.

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I think it should be "She had *long* given up..."

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Hed longed given up pushing her, had learned the hard way that the more he pushed, the more she pulled away.

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I think you mean "He'd *long* given up..."

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There was no romantic pause while he whispered sweet nothings into her ear. He wasnt like the boy who had left her so he could live freely with his daughterhe never had been and never would be and she liked that.

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I found this sentence confusing because it took me a while to figure out you were referring to Duncan. I don't think it adds much to Veronica's thoughts, and the scene could be strengthened simply by cutting it.

Just another typo (I think it should be "she didn't *belong*"):

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She wanted to slap his face, tell him that he shouldnt feel that way about her, tell him that she didnt belonged to anybody.

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And probably my favorite part of all:

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And so shed stopped believing in God.

Her father would have been disappointed in her, because no matter how jaded hed been, Keith Mars had never stopped believing in God. But then again, he was no longer around to be disappointed in her, was he? God had taken him away.

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Sob! Heart-wrenching and perfect.

I also like how you come back to the "no God" thing later by saying something like "Perhaps there was no God, but this was heaven." Just great!